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This is my heart.

Broken, bruised, bleeding.

Take it and please don't break it...
It brings blood to my hollow veins and makes me remember that I am alive and still aching.


Always aching, always hurting...
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I try to make things picture perfect,
I try not to make mistakes.
Somehow my cheeks are always burning
From one more heartache
One more heartache...
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I like this quite a bit. The alliteration in the second line and rhyme in the third (take it ... break it) were effective without being forced.

I am not all together convinced that is sad. There is a small note of hope in the idea of since I am feeling pain, I know that I am still alive.
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~PrincessBlackRose May 14, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! :)
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~bystander55 May 11, 2011  Student Photographer
The only thing i really don't like about sad poetry is you have 2 be sad 2 write it
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:iconlonelyemogirl4evr:
I thought I had your heart already Tina Fay *grin*
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~PrincessBlackRose May 10, 2011  Student Writer
*softly* Without even trying...somehow you do...
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:iconlonelyemogirl4evr:
Then this heart is not for sale. It is mine and I wouldn't sell it for all the jewels of the world.
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~PrincessBlackRose May 12, 2011  Student Writer
...It is a shattered and black thing...it is worth nothing...
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:iconlonelyemogirl4evr:
Its the most important thing in the world to me.....if it breaks....I die along with it....
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~PrincessBlackRose May 12, 2011  Student Writer
It has been broken so many times...it isn't even in its owner's chest anymore...nothing is left but a faint outline of hope, filled with the blood from the broken pieces...
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:iconlonelyemogirl4evr:
....Don't worry Tina Fay....I will make it whole again....if you let me....
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